Hello Vincent. Just meandered in here, and have been writing all of my life. Wanted to say that, dear Vincent, please ignore all of these people worrying about form and "what they would have said"....gross. What is poetic about souls such as those?? The line about "You're made of enduring fractions" ricocheted around my head and heart. I loved every thump it made. It's by far the most fantastic thing I have read on a site that seems mostly composed of High School sophomores with scars on their wrists. Good luck. Keep writing.