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Old 07-11-2007, 05:41 AM
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Re: Creative Writing

This is a good attempt. I had guessed pretty early on that he was in the wrong class and it didnt take too long to realise that there was a probability that they were deaf.

I think you should only use the word 'thin' once in that line near the beginning, with reference to his moustache.
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