Thread: John Meets God
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Old 07-11-2007, 06:13 AM
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Re: John Meets God

I have to agree with some of the comments already made here in that I thought it could have done with more development. It has potential to be expanded further. There didnt seem to be enough surprise from the main character that he was meeting God. Also, I felt that the characters could have done with more descriptions etc as at times it reminded me a bit of 'a man walked into a bar' scenario, with not enough depth.
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