Hey Jayna! Fascinating piece you have here! Glad squattaz brought it up, otherwise it would've been awhile until I could get around to reading it!
Couple things:
Quote:
What people say or do or think
What is more important than facts
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The first line you almost stop short in the thought pattern then you change directions in the next line with no real working transition of some sort.
Also, there are some places which could use a little extra punctuation to bring out more meaning an punch to the piece (mostly Question Marks and Commas)
Overall, it isn't a bad poem, yet it could use a bit of work to help it flow a bit better with what is given
