[Ryankia]

I like this piece. It is simple and conveys a good concept.

There are a couple things which I feel is lacking here which would really help this piece stand out.

1) Commas. Though not always necessary, I felt the way you presented this piece could be helped with commas.

I.E. - "If a mirror
Breaks now,
All of us
Could hear"

2) " I can't help asking myself" - I think "I can't help but ask myself" sounds a bit better in this case.

Just those couple of things and it looks great!