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Re: On the Other Side of the Glass
I enjoyed this one as well, though Lu is spot on with it being unnecessary to spell it out for the reader. Something more abstract would force the reader to think a bit, which a great poem should. The only other suggestion I have is the formatting, the choppiness of the lines are hard on the eyes... maybe break some of them up or center the piece. Otherwise, great ideas in there!
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