[Vail]

As much as I want to review this.. your negative tones throughout, and your feeling of superiority that are displayed within the work really turn me off from the whole piece... Meh..

I will give it a review, whateva... Okay.. free form at it's best.. not saying it's a good write, just saying it is completely free form. I thought you were going with a pattern adding one more line to each additional stanza... but that idea was shredded... maybe not a bad idea if you ever consider to rework this. Ummm.. your capitalization is off in certain lines... I really shouldn't judge this as I have done it myself in the past, I don't know if you're trying to bring emphasis to the words (which subconsciously is probably what you are doing) but I feel the urge to point it out as incorrect form nonetheless.

And now I must apologize as a complete idiot.. I didn't realize that the perspective was first from an editor to an aspiring writer... I caught that much better through about my fifth reread of it.. again, I will not erase my ignorance of this point from the beginning of this review. It only goes to prove that that tone is hard to catch on your first couple of reads.. I would recommend trying to strengthen that tone a little bit or maybe shed a little more light on whom is speaking, I'm not suggesting a font change, as I hate that, but maybe a few more clues littered throughout the work.. Meh... Thanks for sharing, not a bad write.