['Ginnis]

Wow Timmay, I'm impressed. Your writing seems to get more and more sophisticated. Good for you.

The piece started out such an omnipotet and philosophical air that when you began to relaet it to "everyman"s I felt as if you were jeaordizing the integrity of the piece, however, I think you made it work towards the end. Great voice, however I would suggest perhaps refining the diction in reference to the normal people in the middle of the text. Your talk of God and Death is incredibly respective, but I feel as if you've belittled man too much.