[jerH]

Originally Posted by ea_blue

Thanks purpulfantom. Yes, this whole process is working out well. It's good to get feedback. Glad you like the new paragraph.

Thanks, jerH for another catch. I don't know why, but I have a habit of leaving out entire words. *sigh* That might have been the result of one to many Racer 5 IPAs (forced down my throat by an evil force, of course...).

Here is the original of the part you feel is rough:


See if this sounds smoother:
"I walked up to the entrance as someone inside shouted, "Farkin' shite!"

The sound of Irish cursing mirrored my earlier frustration and introduced me to Patrick Hiromatsu. A mixed Irish/Japanese who loved Bonsai Trees."

Thanks for the feedback!

ea_blue

That's better....Keep up the good work!