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Old 21-11-2007, 01:11 AM
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Re: Moving On

well, the feedback i want to give you is that your writings are like shifting scenes one after another. there are dialogues, script, location, but they are changing from one to another without being like a narrative. the feel, the continuity is missing. it fails to involve the reader. and if you can make out what i just wrote, maybe you'd explain it to me too!! hahaha!!

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