[Timmay]

for the most part, this was good. you have good description, an alright premise (not my type of thing, but thats me), and over all an interesting character, as fantasy like as he is.

If i could, however, I would suggest that you look over this thing MANY MANY TIMES. its not that you have a bad story, mind you, its just your... language.

for instance, in this short story, you say the word "colts" a total of 4 times. this would be fine if you had a longer story, but because of how dence it is, this repetition of words becomes an annoyance. Swap out one of the "colts" for the actual name of the gun; a colt peacemaker, an M1911, an M9, any number of names. Not only does this ad flavor, but it clarifies things; Colt is a company. colt could be anything from clot manufacturing; a M4 carbine, an m1895, or even an ACR.

another complaint is the dialogue. this one is minor, but make the dialogue more...life like. right now, its like its one of those japanese animation things, which, if you were aiming for, you hit right on the head, but it just sounds so inhuman.

“This is the man I have been hunting down for centuries. He is a time traveler. Why the hell is he here?”

if i could have my way with it, i would probably phrase it as, "I've been hunting this son of a bitch time traveler for ages." "why the hell is he here," sounds fine tho.

other wise, great job. i can tell, give it about year and you'll be writting some sick stuff. keep up the good work