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Old 29-11-2007, 06:38 AM
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Re: Death and the People

Did you intend “known?”

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However, this was only know by those who believed in predestination and Death himself, mainly due to the ignorance of man.
Question, would it not seem less awkward by changing the following?

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Few people bother recognizing something that is looking them in the face.
(Original) Few people bother recognizing that something is looking (perhaps “staring”) them in the face.

Again, I think you meant “known.”
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One last, extremely well known fact is that…
What if instead of “force,” twice…History, in face, was a force, a (power, entity, influence) stronger than God, (take out even).

I understand that is a humorous submission, but what about using “ashes,” in replacement of “dust.” Dust seems too cruel.
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