Thread: Metallic Taste
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Old 01-12-2007, 06:33 AM
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Re: Metallic Taste

I like that. I already said to you I love the format. Now for the poem itself. It has a nice narrative and flow. I enjoed the fact that the last lines reflected the first lines.

In general, I think if not your best, one of the best. One thing thoough. Given the format, I'd enjoy if you had played a little more with repetition like you did with the last lines. But still, good work.
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