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Re: Metallic Taste
You pretty much already know my opinions of this (which always makes commenting on your poems on SM so hard!), but I will say that I liked the formatting better on the paper too. But still, I like the added visual tag, the sharp edges, the repetition of the two slanting lines and the climax stanza in the middle. Lovely.
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The fog comes
on little cat feet.
It sits looking
over harbor and city
on silent haunches
and then moves on.
-Carl Sandburg
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