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Re: The Prey Cycle
Ah, vampire poem. I like the circular effect of the repeated first/last stanza. However, I think you were going for a 5-7-5, and you miscounted line two of stanza 3 (only 6 syllables). Substitute between for inbetween? Still, a lovely, dark, vampiric poem.
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The fog comes
on little cat feet.
It sits looking
over harbor and city
on silent haunches
and then moves on.
-Carl Sandburg
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