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Old 06-12-2007, 11:42 AM
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Re: [PICK] The Nightcomers (Chapter 1) - The Coming of the Night

I personaly loved it, and not being anything close to an editer( i have my buddy edit my storys) i didnt notice anything out of context from what id use. I love how you gave put in suspense, right now im hating you for having it being so short. yes its that suspenseful
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