|
Re: [PICK] The Cauldron
Quote:
where Life and Death meet and meld
into one elixir of moon- and sun-weld.
|
these two lines are excellent.
but i'm not happy about "deep depths" and the repeat of "deep" next, and i also feel that silent sound would be better, although the style suggests otherwise.
hirak.
__________________
Who has understood the meaning of time,
For time alone is a mirage of a kind.
For to find time, is a dream of Man,
To be a man, whom time shall find.
Hirak.
|