[desiraejones333]

"Hello, you must be Jessica and Lindsay. Brent has told me so much about you," the lady explained, smiling an exaggerated smile.

"Yes we are, may I ask who you are?" Jessica asked politely.

"Oh, silly me, I'm Miranda Carlson, Brent's girlfriend. He talks so much about you, but never mentioned how pretty you both are," Miranda smiled again.

The two girls stood there, putting on a fake smile and looking at each other from the corner of their eyes, starting to get a little scared.

"Miranda, who's there?" Brent's voice called from somewhere in the house.

"Oh, it's your sisters," Miranda explained.

Brent ran towards the door. "And you kept them outside? Come on now, that's no way to treat them. Come on in girls," Brent exclaimed.

"I'm sorry. I got carried away." Miranda put on that smile again and the girls shuddered as they entered the house.

Sure, the house was nice on the outside, but it was even nicer in the inside. All the rooms were so neat, and everything seemed to match. You could tell a girl lived there, because many of the rooms had more girly colors.

"So, what do you think of my room-mate?" Brent asked after he led them to his quaint living room and pointed to the couch, insisting that they sat down.

"Room-mate?? Miranda said you were her boyfriend!" Lindsay piped up for the first time since they arrived.

"What? Oh not again, she likes to think we are. We really aren't. She's a little-" Brent began to explain, before the girls cut him off, exclaiming, "Crazy!"

"Well, I was going for something a little less harsh, but yes, crazy." Brent boomed with laughter just as Miranda entered the room.

"Would you girls like some cookies and milk?" Miranda asked.

"There she goes with that smile again," Jessica whispered in Lindsay's ear.

"None for me thanks, I just ate," Jessica fibbed, biting her tongue afterwards.

"Me neither," Lindsay replied.

"Miranda, would you mind leaving me to talk to my sisters alone for some time please." Brent asked politely.

"Sure honey, I'll just go put another load in the dishwasher," Miranda snickered.

"Miranda! I am not your boyfriend, so please stop calling me honey!" Brent snapped.

"I'm sorry."

Miranda went silent and walked out of the room.

"Wow Brent, wasn't that a little harsh? She seemed really upset!" Jessica asked considerately.

"I know, I feel bad, but if I don't say anything, she just keeps going on with it," Brent explained.

"Brent's right, Jess, she is weird anyways," Lindsay said stubbornly.

"LINDS!" the two others cried.

"What? You both said she was crazy before," Lindsay snapped back.

"Ya, but that's different, she's right in the next room," Jessica snapped again.

"Sorry." Lindsay frowned.

"It's alright, just try and watch out next time, ok Linds?" Brent said apologetically.

"Okay," Lindsay said again.

"Alright, anyways, I just wanted to tell you guys that you are welcome here anytime," Brent explained.

"We'll be here a lot!" Jessica laughed.

Lindsay nodded in agreement and the three of them laughed some more.

They talked for about a half hour longer until Jessica remembered she had homework, and realized their parents would start getting worried. So the girls left and walked home, each giving Brent a hug and a kiss before leaving.

[JirQUEST]

i havent read the last 3 chapters, but i reckon you can remove the "he snapped", "she said apologetically", "she snickered" etc. they just seem to slow the story, and really, your conversation alone should tell us how they are talking. also, have a period after ending your sentences. u were missing that after each dialogue.

what is the point of this chapter? the way i see it, there is nothing to hook me in place, other than that miranda seems a bit wanky.

[Evrviglnt]

Psycho! Great twist.

[desiraejones333]

lol thank you

[Peppy]

I don't know what to say. Hmmmmmmmm...

BRB

[Peppy]

When I finished reading this, I was kind of disappionted. Some of the questions in the story weren't answered. Maybe they have but I didn't notice them. Like why does the father hate Brent??? Maybe there's a missing chapter somewhere.