[colinbaker62]

Today's the day, we're in a line,
All bathing in the warm sunshine,

That time of year, the school sports day,
I'm entered in the class sack race.

Our teacher cries out "ON YOUR MARKS!"
My heart a-thumping, hand on sack,

But Lucy sets off way to soon,
And tangles with the egg and spoon.

Our teacher yells "GET BACK IN LINE !"
And starts us all a second time,

Now hands gripped tightly to my sack,
I start to hop, and so does Jack.

So too does Mick, Kate, Ruth and Zack,
Lance, me and Lucy, at the back,

I've now just one thing on my mind,
To be the first to cross the line.

But Jack is hopping super quick,
Along with Lance and Zack and Mick,

Like four bull frogs all hopping mad,
They're boing, boing, boinging in their bags.

So Lance and Zack and Mick and Jack,
Are happily bouncing down the track,

But wait, CRASH! WALLOP! Jack and Mick,
Have formed a heap in front of Dick.

Now Dick is tumbling, so is Kate,
Like skittles in a summer fete,

So bouncing like a pogo stick,
I boing and bounce right over Mick.

Now in the lead, I've line in sight,
I bounce and hop with all my might,

Then wearing broad grin on my face,
Cry out "I'VE WON MY FIRST SACK RACE"


(Colin Baker 05)


Written to mark the occasion of my youngest daughter's first ever sack race in school. And she won!

[rjd_39]

Nice rhyming scheme! ^^

[Ryankia]

Today's the day, we're in a line,
All bathing in the warm sunshine, This line needs a little something more then it is perfect. Perhaps add "bright" before warm. That will help.
That time of year, the school sports day,
I'm entered in the class sack race. I think "I have" sounds better than "I'm".

My teacher cries out "ON YOUR MARKS!"
My heart a thumping, hand on sack,
But Lucy goes off way to soon,
And tangles with the 'egg and spoon.

Our teacher yells "GET BACK IN LINE !"
And starts us all a second time,
Then fingers gripping to my sack,
I start to hop, and so does Jack.

So too does Mick, Kate, Ruth and Zack,
Lance, me and Lucy, at the back,
I've now just one thing on my mind,
To be the first to cross the line.

But Jack is hopping super quick,
Along with Lance and Zack and Mick,
Like four bull frogs all hopping mad,
They're boing, boing, boinging in their bags.

So Lance and Zack and Mick and Jack,
Are happily bouncing down the track,
But wait, CRASH! WALLOP! Jack and Mick,
Have formed a heap in front of Dick.

Now Dick is tumbling and so is Kate,
Like skittles in a summer fete,
So bouncing like a pogo stick,
I boing and bounce right over Mick.

Now in the lead, I've line in sight,
I bounce and hop with all my might,
Then wearing broad grin on my face,
Cry out "I've won my first sack race."

Utterly adorable. Other than the couple of things I pointed out, this is just perfect! Looooooove it

Thanks Ryankia, Colin

[colinbaker62]

Just thought some readers might like to know that my above work has been superbly illustrated by a very talented lady named Nicole Brekelbaum, who is from the States..Click on the link below to view..




http://edu.youngachieversinc.com/sack_race.html

[Lubesh]

Thanks for sharing that colin, highlights ur work greatly.