[Lubesh]

Drink your milk it’s good for you

You’ll grow up nice and tall

I’m still at the table though

I’m only three feet small


Mummy says I’ll grow up big

But look I’m still the same

Maybe if I drink some more

Perhaps the cow's to blame


Yes, I’ll find a bigger cow

Then I’ll start to climb

Mummy says not all at once

You have to give it time

[colinbaker62]

What a lovely poem this is. The innocence in a child is so often a rich source of writing material. That much I do know as a father of three...

Colin

[Peppy]

Excellent. It gave a nostalgic feeling.

[rjd_39]

its nice

[Ryankia]

Drink your milk, it's good for you

You'll grow up nice and tall

I'm still here ("here" kinda throws the line off) at the table though

I'm only three feet small (small?)


Mummy says I'll grow up big

But look, I'm still the same

Maybe if I drink some more

Perhaps the cow is to blame This line seems off rhythmically. I shall leave that up to you to fix though.


Yes, I'll find a bigger cow

Then I'll start to climb

Mummy says not all in one day ("not all at once")

You have to give it time

Very good. Not much needing to be fixed!

[DarkPower]

well arnt we just the little editor ryankia. anyway I hadnt seen this poem before now anita lovely. Its very cute. the end especially .. the last verse I mean was very nice.

Originally Posted by Ryankia

Drink your milk, it's good for you

You'll grow up nice and tall

I'm still here ("here" kinda throws the line off) at the table though

I'm only three feet small (small?)


Mummy says I'll grow up big

But look, I'm still the same

Maybe if I drink some more

Perhaps the cow is to blame This line seems off rhythmically. I shall leave that up to you to fix though.


Yes, I'll find a bigger cow

Then I'll start to climb

Mummy says not all in one day ("not all at once")

You have to give it time

Very good. Not much needing to be fixed!

Yes thanks ry i missed the 'here' but the 'small' is meant as a play on height thru a child's eyes

[Ryankia]

Hey, of course. It is how I comment. Help people bring out the best in their works. :p