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26-07-2005, 02:37 AM
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If I Die
"Dad? If I die, Would I stay sound asleep? Could I open one eye? Could I peak, smile and speak? Would I feel sad, or cry?" "Well............" "And dad? If I die, Would there be day and night? Suns and moons in the sky?" Would I see flowers bright? Could we still play I spy?" "Erm.............." "And dad? If I die, Could I go to the park? Fly my red and blue kite? Could I play until dark? Ride my two-wheeler bike?" "Let's see..........." "And dad? When somebody dies, Do they have mams and dads And big sisters who fight? If they don't have these dad, then I'm staying alive!" (Colin Baker July, 05) (Sometimes, children do ask the most wonderful of questions. Brittany decided to enquire after the concept of death one bedtime when she was six years of age, and lest we forget, there is always one of two fundamental means of addressing such questions. Either from a materialist standpoint, or else an idealist one. Which did I choose? Answers on a postcard please.................)
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26-07-2005, 09:08 AM
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yes, well handled colin , the hands on approach is to be admired.......lol good stuff anyway
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10-08-2005, 07:44 PM
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nice.... has a hidden sadness.... :'(
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17-08-2005, 01:01 AM
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I loved it, simply for the fact of the child asking so many questions. I have a niece who is 2 and a half and has discovered the word "Why?". When my husband asks her to do something, she will ask "Why?" in her cute little whiney voice. This touched on that memory perfectly, excellent job.
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17-08-2005, 02:30 AM
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Yes Ryankia, this poem captures the moment when the concept of 'death' is still very primitive in my youngest daughter's mind, as is the case for any child. This is why religious indoctrination of children must be viewed as a bad phenomenon and resisted whenever possible, as idealist ideas are being spoon-fed to uncritical minds. That must be seen as sad. The most intellectual of discussions about indoctrination of children by way of religious values is to be found in the writing of the late E.P.Thompson, especially his masterpiece 'The Making of the English Working Class'. Colin
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29-09-2005, 12:13 PM
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That was worth reading. It captured, with its playful rhyme, childhood. The parental response was perfect. Very Shel Silverstein (one of my favorites no matter how much I read).
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02-10-2005, 01:39 PM
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Ah... This is sad, and cute... It sort of makes me think of the great little things in life that make life worth living - like putting my feet in the stream, lloking at teh falls, reading a bood, laughing with my friends... lol...
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21-01-2006, 11:15 AM
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Very interesting subject. Keep up the great work.
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27-02-2006, 10:20 PM
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13-03-2006, 07:14 AM
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A very good poem, and well handled i may add
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08-04-2006, 06:53 AM
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Thank you Enreg, and to all others..
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09-04-2006, 09:20 PM
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Lol, wow funny and sad, a child thinking about death already. But still interesting and a good poem none the less, good use of character voice, even if it was a real situation.
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24-05-2006, 09:53 AM
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thats pretty, I like the way you layed it out...
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25-05-2006, 01:31 AM
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The poem was truly inspiring, I loved it. It had much neatness and simplisity.
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25-05-2006, 03:36 AM
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Hi aki_tsuki and thanks for reading and posting thoughts. Colin
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25-05-2006, 03:37 AM
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Thank you masaruhibbert29, your comments are very kind. Colin
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08-09-2006, 02:25 PM
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Colin,do you know that this is the first thread I read when I started? I love it soooo much that every once in a while I will read it again and again. Good job,bro!
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13-09-2006, 09:50 AM
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The curiosity of a child well depicted here. Still getting comments over a year after posting means that this has really struck a chord with some people. It doesn't really seem to have a flowing rhythm but the point of poignant to the point where it is mostly overlooked. Not bad.
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17-09-2006, 11:15 PM
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I've read this one a few times now...i always seem to enjoy it ^^...its very very good work. Thanks for sharing it, things like this are always the best to read.
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18-09-2006, 08:24 AM
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Hello 'dingoxxx' and thanks Colin
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18-09-2006, 08:28 AM
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Hello 'Syrah' and thank you for commenting. You are correct I would suggest in saying the poem has no obvious metre or rhythm, but it was set out like a poem really, above all to capture the innocence and emotion I have to say of the moment. One second you are tucking your child into bed, the next, you are both engaged in a discussion about death and dying. Colin
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