[Ryankia]

Tick tick
Tock tock
The clock, the clock
Goes knockity knock

Seconds to minutes
And minutes to hours
The hands stir on
Children are being sour

Off off
Onwards fly
To calm the sound
Ringing through the sky

Through the tall
O'er the small
We leap and skip,
And soar above all

Look look
See see
The children are up
Listen to their scream

Hurry hurry
Rush rush
Sing a sweet song
Get rid of the fuss

Doze doze
Rest rest
The children are tired
So sleep your best

Fast slow
Slow fast
We leap and skip
Home to sleep atlast

On on
Offwards fly
We calmed the sound
Ringing through the sky

Seconds to minutes
Minutes to hours
The hands spin on
No children being sour

Tick tick
Tock tock
The clock, the clock
Goes knockity knock

[Lubesh]

That is a great chirpy, children's poem nice one ryankia. It skipped as it should!

[Storiesmaniac]

Ha ha, that was quite good, i mean im not really into those type of poems but i enjoyed that one.

[colinbaker62]

I love children's poems and this is indeed a very good one in my book. Now where did I put that book ?

[Darkened1]

I liked the rythm and rhyme but why are the children hollering and screaming...it seemed to hint that the poem was two faced.

[Keplaz]

I loved it. I went to see an award winning children's poet at my university and she read her poems to us. I can honestly say yours was better than a lot of the ones she read. It was honest, funny and so lively. No child would get bored reading it and I must confess neither was this adult. That was a great piece of work. Keep it up.

[Ryankia]

Lol - glad everyone enjoyed it. I can honestly say, very little work went into this piece but I did later fix a couple of wording issues when I thought about seriously posting it.

~blushes~ Again, thanks for the wonderful comments

[Elvisceration]

I can see how this would work. People think that writing for children is easy. Did you ever see the episode of Black Books where they tried to write a children's book?

[Ryankia]

No - but I have always enjoyed children's stories and poems. I never really ever tried to write them but I might try and focus on that aspect a bit more. Stretch my ideals/talents out side of my normal box

[Gigle]

Ooo so cute! And good symmetry from beginning to end.

[Coolness]

That was alot of fun to read. It really is a good children's poem.

[Syrah]

The only thing I found to critique...

"No sound do children holler"
seems to have a little interruption on flow due to number of beat change.

Other than that, I absolutely loved it. I really like the upbeat funloving type poems instead of everything being so serious.

[Ravane]

this was a nice poem. Good job.

good job, already sounds like a classic

[Corneac]

I was trying to to find a poem to read to my four year old niece and stumbled across this one. She loved it! I wonder what it is about his type of lyrical quality and rhythm that appeals to children so much?

[DebbieD]

Oh, I just loved this. Inspired me to try my hand at a poem for children. I have a feeling that writing poetry for children will have the affect of bringing a little of the magic of childhood back into the writer of the poem.

[RENA HANDS]

Enchanting and filled with much Particulars as are the lives of children. What is the rule of repeating when writing any poem even if they are for children too?

[waiting4godot]

hello,
IT is "childishly" beautiful, I just like it ! something like tictoc ryhtm that reminds us of our childish interests games and laughs when we were still kids. Good job Ryankia

[DragonLover]

its good i love it

[Star_Princess]

First of all I think it's very cute I like it a lot. Very appropriate for teaching to kids in kindergarten, it sounds like a lot of fun

[Perscription]

this is really good! would have no qualms reading this to children, better than most published childrens writers! Dances along at a great pace and has great variation in sound to keep a child interested, plus useful for making funny noises at them! great work.