[king4adaze5]

Hey there little kitty cat
Come and sit upon my lap

Tell me where you came from
While we sit underneath the sun

When did you arrive and how?
Would you like some milk? Meow!

What beautiful and soft fur
Think I'll call you Tiger! Purrr

oh, you are really sweet
How about something to eat?

And look at this, a squeak toy
Yes, it's yours my furry joy

I know you don't have a home
But, you're no longer all alone

So, let's go inside and play
And you are welcome to stay

[Gwenhwyfar]

Such a sweet little poem...especially when intended for an audience of children. I think the rhyme is done pretty well, but the rhythm is definitely a bit hard to nail down. Some syllables are missing and then awkwardly turn up in a place that makes it sound a bit wordy and crowded at times. I do like the use of onomatopoeia, "meow" and "purr."

I think this works great for children. Just consider a bit of rewording to make the rhythm a bit more smooth, since little ones are going to want to memorize this and repeat it.

[king4adaze5]

Thank you very much for the comments Gwenhwyfar

[Syrah]

This is a drastic difference from some of your other poems. Colorful person I should say. LOL. Seriously, though. This is sweet. Little bit of a hard time establishing a rhythm to read this with but once I did it seemed smooth. I like the meow and purr. I thought it added a nice touch. Sweet, K4D

[king4adaze5]

Thank you Syrah

[Storiesmaniac]

from and sun dont rhyme...you should fix those lines...other then that very cute...a huge difference, cant say i didnt enjoy it though...keep it up.

[king4adaze5]

Thank you Stories, glad you liked it! This was inspired by my new little kitten, Tiger