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Old 31-12-2006, 04:35 PM
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A Joyful Stroll

A happy duck strode out one day,
Unaware the sky was grey,
He plonked along in his webbed feet,
Not knowing of whom he would meet,
He struck a path that wound afar,
He walked along his eyes a star,
He hit a wall of crimson stone,
He hit his beak and gave a groan,
He was overcome by a dizzy spell,
Here and now; down he fell,

A little later when he awoke,
He gave his beak a good ol' poke,
Then he gave a little scream,
Just to let off some anger stream,
Then he noticed with a fright,
He was nude, oh what a sight,
Embarrassment flowed through his heart,
To top it off he did a fart,

Around the bend came the butcher boy,
He picked him up like a children's toy,
He held him against a chopping board,
Around him hung a butchers hoard,
He held a knife in his right hand,
Without my friend the duck's command,
But this poor duck never fled,
For in a sec he was dead,

A pleasant stroll around the block,
Had ended this ducks' lifetime clock,
Let this be lesson told,
A moral that is mighty bold,
If you go and walk somewhere,
I warn you be aware,
If the daytime sky is grey,
Don't go out and play today

Authors Note: I wrote this yonks ago...for a lark mainly. But I thought I may as well put it up.
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Old 02-01-2007, 10:33 AM
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Re: A Joyfull Stroll

Very choppy...lol Really great addition to the children's section. Have you anymore?
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Old 02-01-2007, 03:10 PM
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Re: A Joyfull Stroll

Thanks Lubesh! Nah, don't have anymore, but I'm happy to write some. It's kind of inspired by that whole Roald Dahl-esque type of children's rhyme. I appreciate your comment...
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Old 03-01-2007, 02:37 AM
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Re: A Joyfull Stroll

When I was first reading this, I didn't note the "genre". As I got down to the butcher and sensed what was coming, I felt "oh this is Dark". But now I see why it could be considered a children's entry.

You may have just contributed to an increase in the number of children who hide away in the house instead of running around outside...
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Re: A Joyful Stroll

I also would like to add to that, it seems that no matter where I go and view the children's area, all I see are either half-horrific or poetry and stories that only older children would understand, and that the younger children would all widen their eyes and begin to bawl... you're sick man! Sick!

But in a very interesting way.
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Sick? Me? Haha...thankyou
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Re: A Joyful Stroll

aww thats cute. I would read it to my kid...if i had one...i totally would. lol.
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haha...thanks Venus
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its a great edition to childrens section. its cute and funny at te same time. a must read by parents to the children
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Thanks arsenalite
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Re: A Joyful Stroll

Haha, this was great, I loved it! That poor duck, though... it's a little morbid, I think I'd wait until my kids were at least 5 before reading this to them... Very good, you should write more
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Old 18-03-2007, 09:28 AM
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Haha...thanks Seamless, I've got a few more in here and yet they get steadily more 'morbid' as they go. Lol.
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I thought that this was the funniest thing I have read in a while. If you have anymore please put them up.
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Re: A Joyful Stroll

It is so quiet at work and I think I just startled myself with laughter right around that fart line. Haha, yes, great addition to the children's section, though may be a bit graphic for the likes of some. Poor duckie, but clever and funny tale... and right, got it, no walking around on a gloomy day by myself hehe... seriously though, this one shows off your diversity a bit, simple yet funny, with great rhyme and rhythm!
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Hahaha...thnks babe! I wrote this when i was about 14 I think...my oldet piece on here...
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