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Old 13-04-2007, 03:07 AM
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Rice Krispie Treats Are Delicious
I got a rice krispie treat,
Oh what a magnificent sweet.
Mmm, mmm,
I just can't wait to eat,
So I can enjoy,
My rice krispie treat.

I took a bite,
Mmm,
It tastes so fine,
Mmm, mmm, mmm,
This rice krispie's all mine.

Yay, yay, whoopety-doo!
Oww...
What the hell?
My tooth fell out,
Pout, pout, pout,
Boo, hoo, hoo.






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Old 13-04-2007, 03:38 AM
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lol this is funny. yummy title. sweet one mate
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Old 13-04-2007, 02:54 PM
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Re: Rice Krispie Treats Are Delicious
Interesting. I think the use of sounds as langauge would really appeal to kids. And man it made me feel like rice crispy square. Nice job...
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lol corn stop thinking about food geeez mate

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Re: Rice Krispie Treats Are Delicious
This is a cute poem. I enjoyed it. It captures the child's idea of sweets. Seeing as how this is a children's poem you might want to change "hell" to heck but that's just a suggestion. Otherwise nice poem that flows well and is fun.
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