[superbum]

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Satin has a run in with Satan.


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INT. SATIN’S BEDROOM - AFTERNOON


SATIN walks into his room and takes off his shirt with a sigh of relief. He then walks over to the mirror above his dresser and admires his horns, running his hand along them, making head butting motions and bull charges.

SATAN appears out of no where, visible behind Satin in the mirror. He looks a little like Woody Alan.

SATAN
(hurt sounding)
I thought we had an agreement.

SATIN
Woah, you just pop up anywhere now? I mean this is my bedroom, most people have a little respect for that.

SATAN
(defending his actions)
Well you're not really doing anything to be embarrassed of.

SATIN
Yeah but it’s kinda my room I don’t like it when people just barge in.

SATAN
So are you saying you want me to wait in the hall?

SATIN
No, no, it’s fine, go on with what you needed to say, just in the future if you could knock or something.

SATAN
Ok, that’s fine, I was just a little distraught that you didn’t even try to kill Super Bum when you came in, and you promised me you’d be prompt, otherwise I'd be more courteous.

SATIN
I am going to be prompt, I just forgot that he owed me twenty bucks, and if I kill him, ya know, I’m just out that money... it’s not really the smartest thing to do.

SATAN
The thing is people are already bitching that I gave you those horns BEFORE you killed him. I had to listen to Fred rambling for twenty minutes about how it wasn’t fair that he had to whack his grandma before he lost his virginity and...

SATIN
Yeah. I’m sure, but like I said I wanted him to see the horns before he died, so I could rub it in his face. We really couldn’t have done it any other way.

SATAN
I know, I know. I’m not saying it’s your fault, I just need results to show everybody else so they let up the pressure.

SATIN
(While putting on a shirt that says "fnord")
And you’ll get them, don’t worry.

SATAN
Maybe just try asking for the money, speed things up a little bit.

FUDY walks in the door no one takes any notice.

SATIN
Look I’ve got to go, Family Guy is about to come on.

FUDY
Is that Satan?

SATIN
(to Fudy)
Yeah
(to Satan dismissingly)
It’s been good talking to you, see you next week.

Satin exits room.

FUDY
You gave Satin those horns didn’t you?

SATAN
I didn’t “give” them to him, he had to earn them, but yeah he got them from me.

FUDY
So he made a deal with you to get them?

SATAN
Mmmmm Hmmmm

FUDY
(wagging tail)
Look I’d be willing to do anything to get my balls back. ANYTHING.

Fudy jumps up on the bed and begins licking himself while talking.

SATAN
That’s fine but you kind of have to be a cult member to make deals with me, it’s one of the few perks they get. I can’t just start making deals with anyone, especially anyone who lives with a cultist.

FUDY
So how do I join?

SATAN
It’s pretty easy really just go down to the headquarters, Neil should still be there, do a little ceremony and you’re in.

FUDY
Where are the headquarters?

SATAN
666 Elm St.

FUDY
Are you serious?

SATAN
What?

FUDY
Isn’t that a little lame?

SATAN
It’s ominous!

FUDY
(suppressed laugh)

SATAN
Look I worked really hard to get a house on the 600 block and then get the address changed to 666, you have no idea what a pain in the ass the post office is to work with!

FUDY
You did that on purpose?

SATAN
Of course!

FUDY
Oh... Ok then, I’m going to go to “666” Elm St and join a Satanic cult.

SATAN
Fuck you.

FUDY
No no no, I think it’s really pretty spooky.

SATAN
Whatever, it’s ominous.

FUDY
I get it now, I’m totally creeped out.

SATAN
I’ve gotta go, I’ve got better things to do than take shit from a dog.

FUDY
Me too, I’ve got to go join a cult at “666” Elm St.

Fudy jumps off the bed and exits the room, leaving Satan alone.

[Peppy]

(I forgot to say this in my first comment: That's f-cked up.)

Hahaha, the Fudy and Satan dialogue was funny. As for the Satin and Satan dialogue, it was weird, but yet it helps point to the direction of the story-line. I should have done more research on these type of entries and I aplogize I could be of no more help.

Good job on writing in a different medium.

Oh yeah, some commas and words seem to be missing.

Wait. I do know one thing about this type of writing. Your dialogue has to be short and to the point. Hahaha, now I remember something. I think some of the dialogue could be shortened to bring the BAM and the BOOM.

I think this should be fixed. It's pretty sloppy:

I had to listen to Fred for twenty minutes ramble about how it wasn’t fair that he had to whack his grandma...