You turn me on; it comes as easily to you as flicking on a switch. I know you wait impatiently as I make myself hot. You know when I'm ready... your fingers grip me tightly as you work me. Oh, the motion! To and fro, up and down, side to side... faster and slower I go at your command. It's so smooth.
But the joy is short-lived.
Your need for me is soon exhausted, and you turn me off as abruptly as you turned me on. I'm left alone till all the heat is gone. Adding insult to injury, you touch me to make sure I'm completely cold now, and cruelly, you send me into my secluded corner.
What can I do? C'est la vie du fer ŕ repasser.
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I don't think there's anything to expand really
I was studying, and I got really bored of it, and there was an iron on the other side of the table, and I just ended up writing this
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Ha, this is so awesome! It's funny how inspiration can strike sometimes and this certainly is a classic example of being creative. Really great emotion, like Shara mentioned. I always love your SoCs and this is wonderful too.
I enjoyed this - more so the second time around when I realized what was really going on. This things always get a chuckle out of me and make me realize things are not always what we assume upon first impression and sometimes we should take those extra moments to really think about it before jumping to conclusions.
Now as far as the iron and its 'feelings', what a sad image in my mind. Very well done!
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See I'm not worried at all. Bri would save the alcohol and her wolfman in the process.
No, the way I wrote it, it was probably impossible to think in a manner other than the manner you thought the first time you read it. That was intentional.
And yes, it's more fun to read it the second time around, because then you kinda see how each description really fits in with both contexts.
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I had read that before, but only came down to commenting just now. It's a very interesting idea, and you materialised it nicely. Just a thing though. It's "C'est la vie dufer ŕ repasser" for a certain iron, or "C'est la vie d'un fer ŕ repasser", for an iron.
I had read that before, but only came down to commenting just now. It's a very interesting idea, and you materialised it nicely. Just a thing though. It's "C'est la vie dufer ŕ repasser" for a certain iron, or "C'est la vie d'un fer ŕ repasser", for an iron.
I thought the way I wrote it, it was "...the life of the iron"
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Ha! Actually had to look up the last line to see the double meaning. ^_^ Another great stream of consciousness, and with very effective color use. ^_^ Well done.
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Do not trust googletranslate dammit! It reads d'un as dans which means in. I've studied french for 6 years its du I tell you . Try this on googletranslate. Je mange(I eat) and Je mangerai(I will eat). How about that? And de le isn't just wrong, de le doesn't exist at all.
You have very errotic mind Gurdit. I can tell already. You did a great job with image and intensity here...(and I have to admit, it took several readings for me to actually get what you were saying...along with reading all the comments.) My French is rough...I'm still learning...but good job with getting to the heart of an iron! I don't know what else to say...
I'm hooked.
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My French is a bit rusty, but u said, ‘That’s life of iron as it has to go past again?’
I thought u were illustrating a scene where a massage was taking place, but then with a translation…
OR...
R u describing an event where iron in the blood is being transported to a particular area of the body?
I don’t get it, but everything leading up to ur conclusion was Brilliant. The imagery and active action(s) of the characters experienced…Brilliant as stated before.
I’ll give a rating 4 of 5. And once u have explained the entire situation, I might just upgrade ur BRILLIANCE…lol
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It would be cruel to say errotic was correct; oh, what the hell.
Liked both the post and the French instruction. I regret that I had to follow the exchange until I learned it was an iron. I had guessed a computer mouse.
@RENA
The writing was a bit of a teaser. I wrote the initial part to be like a somewhat erotic, naughty piece of writing, where the reader would think that it's a scene being described by a man who is being used (sexually ).
Later, I wrote the part in French, which means "It's the life of an iron", because actually, I was describing the iron. If you go back and read the first part again from the perspective of an iron, you'll see that it all actually fits.
@ejenk21
I guess you can say that it's a bit erotic
And honestly, that was not coincidental.
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I can tell already. You did a great job with image and intensity here...(and I have to admit, it took several readings for me to actually get what you were saying...along with reading all the comments.) My French is rough...I'm still learning...but good job with getting to the heart of an iron! I don't know what else to say...
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