['Ginnis]

Dear You:

I quit.

I didn't have to try.

You tried for me. You both tried.

But at one point, you stopped trying.

I've given up without a valid attempt.

Some call it failure. I prefer the term survival.

I mean...

...why bother?

You can't buy happiness.

I'm done faking it.

The latter is worse than the former.

You proved me that.

I suppose this is all your fault.

Like I should take the blame?

Of course you don't blame me.

But still I...we...suffer.

I didn't quit.

Not for you, anyways.

I quit for myself.

And personally...

I wouldn't have it any other way.

XOXOXO

Myself.

[Vorcla]

Hmmm. You're making more attempts at poetry. I like that. You seem to have a flair for it, especially the stream of consciousness stuff.

This is nice and edgy. The tone sort of straddles the fence between hope and despair, with a sort of triumphant, yet bittersweet conclusion. I've always told you that you write dialogue better than anyone I know, and that really helps propel this piece. Very nice, Kara.

[Ryankia]

Loving and living with oneself is often the most difficult trek in life. How many of us love ourselves for exactly who we are? I doubt many would raise their hands. There is always something needing to be changed, altered, removed.

And at what point do we give up and throw in the towel? We don't want to care or to bother, because we lack the ambition to do so or it is too hard. Something holds us back, a feeling, a mirky feeling in the void of time. It laughs at us and calls us names behind our backs.

We are a troubled bunch, humanity, troubled indeed.

[dearest]

The perfect definition of a stream of conciousness. I love how the columns mirror the internal struggle, resolve back to the left after each point has been scored, decision has been made, or thought is added. The structure is very clever, the "dialogue" well thought out and written, and the conclusion satisfying. Beautious, I really enjoyed this and hopefully there's more poetry from you on the horizon? ^_^

[Corneac]

This is interesting. Poetry is revealing, regardless of who it’s from. That's why it interests me from you, because you’re quite disconcerting. I like the personal from you, even if it's not personal.

The form was well done, good way of showing the inner-dialogue, it's good that you can transition your dialogue skills from prose to SOC. This is deffo good SOC. It shows a uncertainty, which isn't seen because your so confident with prose. I enjoyed that, and the universal theme, very relatable and easily read and enjoyed.

Concept was nice, and it's hard to criticize, as is all SOC. because it's exactly, that SOC, and who can criticize your consciousness or how it streams? Well-written.


Succinct, moving, but still cautious. I'd love to see you write more poetry, more revealing, just because I'm curious and I know you have the capability.

['Ginnis]

Thanks guys.

You know, it's interesting. I'd pretty much forgotten that I had written this, and when I re-read it I remembered why and when I wrote it, but that pattern and mind flow was so unfamiliar to me. It's intriguing how we can think one way one moment and then a completely different way the next. Yay, SOC!