[EternalPen]

Synopsis: A continuation of the first Kindergarten Cannibles.


Ashley had decided to form her own guild once, but she was looked down upon by the others. Each of the guild's four members began to... disappear one by one until only she was left. She knew someday that she would be stalked and hunted. Now, though, now above all. They wanted her bad. She had gone far up the scale and others were beginning to get... jealous. After all, she had already taken out a guild leader and two entire guilds on her own. What really shot her up the list was those few adult outsiders that walked by the school fence asking them if they wanted candy. She would agree and tell them to meet her somewhere in secret, then it was over. She was getting all those people that were trying to be nice. She didn't like nice. It would be a different story if they were doing that to kidnap the children. Heck, she might even let them take her if that was what they were really up to.

Bobby was a sort of business man now. Everyone Ashley took down, she handed to Bobby. Everyone Bobby was given, was "expelled" from the school. For this, Bobby gave Ashley his chocolate pudding from his lunch everyday.

There was a sort of cult that was growing, slowly, but steadily. Ashley decided it would be better to be safe than sorry and was plotting to get a small group together and take them down, but it was too late.

The cult had evolved into a guild and they had exposed their name to the playgrounds. The Dizzy Soda Guild. They got their name and status from actually being able to pull off a steal from the teacher herself. Mrs. Dumley went to the restroom and the small group was able to steal the soda she had hidden in her desk. It was a small, half-empty glass bottle, but that was good enough. The drink smelled and tasted bad, but they drank every last drop. They called it the Dizzy Soda, because of the way it made you feel a little dizzy after drinking it. The next day they all had splitting headaches, and they all thought it was from the Dizzy Soda, but they said it was well worth it.

The Dizzy Soda Guild heard about Ashley's status and planned to take her down. They would form a Swarm Gang and just rush her all at once. She would go down with a heck of a fight, but she would go down.

It was to happen today, and Ashley knew, but she was prepared. She looked through her Father's closet and found a cap gun. She fired it at the dumb chipmunk Bobby always chased and the chipmunk died. She knew she had what she needed to survive the Swarm.

After waiting all day and fretting about when it would happen, she went home. Nothing took place and nothing happened. At home her dad complained about the gun missing and he bought another, which she took for good measure the next day.

And good thing too, the next day, it happened. She and Bobby were making an agreement on who he wanted, and what she would get for it when a small boy ran to Ashley and bit her harshly on the arm. Bobby thunked him rather hard on the head, and the child collapsed, unconscious, on the ground. That's when The Swarm rushed in. The school bell rang and a large group of children ran towards Ashley and Bobby screaming their little heads off.

Ashley slipped out the gun that was in her belt and hidden by her shirt and tossed it to Bobby.

"Here!" She exclaimed, "Take this! Don't think, just shoot!"

Bobby watched the gun hit the ground and skid to his feet. He leisurely picked it up and held it steady.

"Ahh," He sighed, "haven't had the chill of this kind, of cold metal touching my hand in a while."

He pointed and clicked the trigger, over and over without stopping. Loud thunderclaps burst through the air continuously and he and Ashley fired at the kids, killing most of them.

Ashley soon ran out of bullets, and Bobby stopped shooting. Ashley threw down her gun and looked around. All of the Swarm was dead but one. The leader, Jamal's slightly older brother, stood in the midst of the destruction and laughed.

"Out of bullets, huh?" He asked Ashley.

"Bobby!" Ashley exclaimed to him, motioning her words with her hands, "Throw me your clip!"

"Why don't I just shoot him?" Bobby asked.

"I want to!" Ashley screamed, very angry at this point, "Give it to me!"

Bobby popped the clip out and threw it. Ashley picked up her gun and held the clip in the air defiantly.

"Haha!" She laughed back at her enemy, "One bullet left in it! You're a dead man!"

A bird quickly swooped down and took the clip that Ashley held in the air and flew away with it. Ashley's eyes grew big and Jamal's brother rushed at her.

They began to bite, hit, kick, punch, and scratch each other in a brutal fight for survival. Bobby simply watched until a small bird flew by, clip in its talons, and flew into a tree. It dropped the clip and fluttered off. Bobby loaded it and pointed it straight at the head of Ashley's assailant.

A small boy, who was watching the whole time, ran to Bobby.

"Don't!" He screamed, "This is Ashley's fight. Let her do this on her own."

"WHATEVER!" Ashley screamed, "SHOOT HIM!"

Bobby put a bullet through Jamal's older brother's head and he and Ashley simply walked off leaving the bodies behind for scavengers of all kinds.

Bobby looked at Ashley, and Ashley looked at Bobby.

They both needed to be a bit more careful, one wrong move, and they could end up like Garfield in a Chinese restaurant. Ashley sighed. This would definitely complicate things.

[Corneac]

I enjoyed this mate. A funny installment. A few plot holes. But they were mostly overshadowed by your good writing and witty creation. Nice job.

[LullabyHearts]

I love the title to start off. Really caught my attention. Good job!

"Bobby was a sort of business man now. Everyone Ashley took down, she handed to Bobby. Everyone Bobby was given, was "expelled" from the school. For this, Bobby gave Ashley his chocolate pudding from his lunch everyday." Little awkward could definitely use some work; the sentence structure is...a little...blah.

Seems to me the short paragraphs are not the best and the longer ones are the better ones.

[EternalPen]

I never seemed to do well in this area of writing, but I try. Thank you for reading and commenting! ^_^

[LullabyHearts]

Hope I wasn't too harsh...I've been told I'm being just a tad too harsh in my critiques

[EternalPen]

No, no it's okay. I like it when people tell me if something is crap or not. I rather have truth. ^_^ Harsh critiques are my favourite, they show me how to improve my stuff.

['Ginnis]

hahaha silly little kids, I loved the concept of a contract killer kinderagardener, really, very nice. If you're not sick of it, I think you should work with the series some more, I for one enjoy it

[EternalPen]

Thank you, I actually look down on these though. ^_^

[RENA HANDS]

Again, a most grossly creation with such absurdity and hilarity.

I shall rate for Parts 1 & 2 4/5!


Br avo.

[fishnchimps]

Great premise, and a good continuation from the first part. You obviously have a great (and slighty twisted) imagination, but the structure and the pacing seems a tad shaky. Also, why are they called guilds, seems a bit strange for a kindegarten. And where are the teachers in all this chaos?

[Randomgold]

The idea of killer kindergartners is oddly amusing to me. You should really keep working on these stories. Develop the whole guild aspect, you have a good thing going there. This one does have a few awkward lines, like in the sixth paragraph, you don't really need the "and" in that sentence.

[EternalPen]

I never liked it that much. I may do a few more parts (Episodes?), though.

[A.V.H]

*reels back in horror* What kind of sick, twisted kindergarteners are these?!! ...I love them!!!

[EternalPen]

You can have one so long as you never sleep when he's around.

>=D

[timtornado3721]

Again, like the first this was grisly good. The odd thing about this story is why would the teachers not notice that some of their students have pieces bitten right out of the kids? Let alone the pile of shot kids from the attack in ch. 2? Maybe you could write in that the teachers are not in complete control of the school. Maybe the Underworld Kindergartners are black mailing them through death threats and the possibility of being eaten in another Ch. later on?

Does gang soud better than a guild? The word Gang implies that they are rough and don't care about rules. Perhaps?

[EternalPen]

Oh, they have complex rules.

And I'm actually working on part 3, for the first time in forever. I'm trying to explain why. Having a girlfriend, I don't have much time to write, but I'll post it the minute I'm done.