[tinkerbell15975]

Author's Note: plez tell me how i should start the next chapter. i am having writers block!!

Chapter 1: The Understanding


"Wake up you lazy bum!!" a sharp, piercing voice rang out. In a lush, green, dew-drop filled meadow next to the Aura Rive, a young lady by the name of Sapphire awoke.

"Do I have to?" she yelled back.

"Get up here now!"

"Now???"

"NOW!!!!!!" was the reply.

"All right already. I'm coming," Sapphire called to the house. Muttering to herself, she relayed what had happened. You see, Sapphire was spending the night at her grandmother's house for her 16th birthday. Sapphire had snuck out of bed to gaze at the starless, cloudless moon. She had brought out her blanket and some food in a bag. She spread out her blanket and laid in the cool night air. Apparently the gentle sound of water flowing over the rocks of the Aura River lulled her to sleep. While she was pondering this, she gathered her things. As she walked up the cobblestone pathway to her grandmother's house, she listened to bluebirds sing their early morning song.

I'm in BIG trouble now! Sapphire thought to herself as she made her way down the pathway. Sapphire opened the iron gate and walked up to the door. As she opened the door, her grandmother burst out in a frightfully loud voice.

"Where have you been?? I have been worrying about you all night long! You should be happy I didn't send the dogs after you, Sapphire Moon!"

Sighing, she told her grandmother what had happened.

"I was thinking and I needed a quite place."

"What were you thinking about?" her grandmother suddenly became a gentle friend instead of a fierce wildcat.

"My mother."

"What about her?" her grandmother asked.

"About how she was murdered," Sapphire said in a sad voice. "I never understood it."

Sapphire looked at her grandmother and said, "Do you know how she died? Please tell me."

When her grandmother saw the question in her eyes, she could not help but want Sapphire to understand. With a sigh, Grandmother Heli¨ne began her sad story.

"16 years ago in a small town called Zahena, a beautiful lady like yourself was taking a walk down a pathway that lead through the woods. Your mother, Crystal, had no idea what lay in store for her. Some people say that it was fate while others say it was bad luck." Grandmother Heli¨ne stopped there.

"Why did you stop!" Sapphire asked angrily.

"Are you sure you want me to go on?" her grandmother asked Sapphire uncertainly.

"I'm 16 years old. I deserve an explanation," Sapphire said determinedly.

"Fine, I will continue. Crystal had walked through the forest for 1 hour and was thirsty. She stopped for a drink at the Immortal River."

[JirQUEST]

a tip: put every new piece of dialogue from separate characters on a new line.

u could write up something like a crime novel and have our young protagonist solve it. just a thought.

[maxaynjj]

You have her in the first paragraph telling her story then later on she tells her story again to her grandmother. So who was she telling her story to in the house?

I would have it turn into something like her mother drank from the eternal spring and the other lady had issue with it, turning into an epic battle and her mother being "dead" but in the end is really trapped between this world and the next forcing her daughter to save her immortal soul....

Hope I helped.