[Bre*akA*way]

Synopsis: When you’ve lost someone closest to you, the person who can read your every move and thought, what do you do? You have no choice but to mourn your lost and try to move on. But what if you couldn’t? What if the reflection you saw in the mirror everyday was a constant reminder of what you had lost? Yourself and others cursed to look at the same thing everyday. What do you do when death, pain, and heartbreak are Forever Reflected?

Chapter 1: Goodbyes

"We are gathered here today to mourn the passing of Alysha Phillip-Gram. She was known as a loving friend, a bright young student, a daughter as well as a sister..."

Alyse held onto her mother as she jerked and cried. This was killing her. A mother should never have to see their child buried. Alyse tried to stay focused and keep the sickness rising in her throat down. She had to stay strong; more for them than for herself. If she broke down, what remained of her family would fall apart.

"Alysha, Alysha."

Alyse turned around startled by the sound of her deceased sisters name.

"Alex, I'm Alyse.” She said once she realized who had called out the name.

Her eyes welled with tears at the sight of her little brother. "He's so innocent he doesn’t even know what's going on,” she thought.

"Oh," he said smiling brightly "I knew you was Leesey. I was just playin'"

"Uh huh" she said smiling for the first time that afternoon.

"I have to go to the bathroom can you take me please"

"Sure Sweets, let me tell mommy"

Alyse looked at her mother. She had stopped crying and was just staring blankly into the distance.

"Momma," she whispered, afraid the slight increase of volume would shatter what was left of her mother. "Momma I'm taking Alex to the bathroom"

Her mother snapped back into her now horrible reality and looked at her remaining daughter with light brown eyes. She looked nothing like herself. Her make up had run and her caramel complexion was now red and puffy. She appeared to have aged over ten years in the last ten minutes. Her youthful face deteriorating with each second that passed without her daughter.

"No Alyse please don’t leave look what happened to your sister. She left and now look at what’s happened. She’s, she, she..."

Unable to voice the words she had been about to say, Alyse’s mother broke down and started to cry with an even greater intensity than before. Alyse gave her mother to an uncle because she couldn't take it anymore. Alyse couldn't hold back the tears any longer. They came in floods and refused to stop. She took her brother's small hand and began walking towards the restrooms.

"Leesey? Leesey what’s wrong? Why you crying for? Is it because Lisha's not coming back?"

Alyse looked at Alex in shock and succumbed to defeat.

"Yea Sweets that’s exactly why I'm crying."

[Lubesh]

the changes I made (missing full stops/periods etc) have not been saved when editing this, sorry. You will have to go through it again and put them in.

[blackdeathvodka]

good start. although, the sisters names are slightly confusing because they're so similar to one another.

[Subconscious]

i agree with the similarities in the names...i got the characters mixed up a few times. great synopsis and good start. i can see the conflict developing and looking forward to the resolution.

[HUNNYBUNNY]

yeah i hope there is more ............because if that it it seems to well not over.........i liked it and i lol was kinda confused to but then again im easaly confused lol good work though

[Aleox]

It was all right, I like the innocence in the little boy's voice, some grammatical errors here and there, and the names are a little too similar for comfort. Otherwise, an OK start. I'd like to see where the story goes.

[Gigle]

I think your synopsis is really the interesting piece here. It is better than the story in my opinion

[Aura]

I'm not sure why anyone would get confused but it was very good. though it was soo short! >_< very touching but damn so short! You did a great job writting this! thumbs up!

[RENA HANDS]

What are the complaints, I could tell the characters apart. Question are Alyse and Aysha twins? There are a few missing periods and other punctuation errors but again as Lubesh stated, you must go back and re-enter them. The story was short but a great beginning to something more. Appealing and Heartfelt.

[Lilyfaery]

This is a good beginning to a story; it was interesting and made me want to find out what happened to Alysha. The only problem I had was in the beginning. I thought that it was from the mother's point of view so it was a little confusing when Alyse started talking.