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Old 05-05-2005, 02:05 PM
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Lightbulb Toreki:Part 3- half the battle...

Note: This is part three of the Toreki seriese.

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Mark raced after his new friends to combat the evil force that almost took their lives.

"Get ready, guys!" yelled Brendan.

Then, Alyssa put in a code on her wristwatch, and something like an oversized skateboard, white in color, apeared under her feat. The others did the same. They were, astonishingly to Mark, hovering about 5 inches off of the ground.

"What are those?" thought Mark.

They were hoverboards, something that the scientists back on Earth were studying before the apocalyps.

As the dust cleared, he began to see the figure that attack them. It was human, but had some nonhuman attributes. He was fairly tall, with pure fire red hair. He had a laser cannon strapped to one arm, and a triple falcon blade on the other- three blades strapped to the arm by cloth or other material. He was wearing camoflouge pants, teared down to about just over his knees. He was barefoot- and only had four toes on each foot, bound together in pairs with the same cloth as is triple falcon blades. And, he was hovering in the air about 6 feet on wings the size of an eagle's.

"They call him the Fallen Angel." said Brendan. "He's the reason you're here, and why we're in this mess."

Katie the cried, "Get ready to attack. A- formation!"

At her command, Alyssa and Brendan darted off to either side, and Mark stayed behind with Katie. At that moment, the Fallen Angel darted down toward him and tried to attack, but missed. Brendan then darted to the Angel, while he was on ground, and hit him right in the face. The Angel the squared back at him and kneed him in the stomach. He fell to the ground unconscious.
At that, the Angel left.

"What was that?" Mark said.

"He attacked us again." said Katie.

"Again? You mean he's done this before? And only to you guys?" asked Mark.

"Yeah," replied Katie, "because we are the newest Toreki warriors. And, just a little word of advice: half the battle is staying alive, and the other half is.."

Then Brendan, still dazed from the attack, inturrupted, "The other half is keeping the other guy dead.", he laughed. "Now that he's gone, lets get you to the training facility, or as we call it, home."


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Mark was amazed at the size of the facility, staring at it in awe.

"I see you like it." commented Alyssa.

"It's aboslutly humongous: three different levels, each with 20 rooms, a kitchen, bunks......"

Then Brendan added, "And my favorite, the buffet bars."

The others laughed in approval. As they entered the training facility, master Po was there to great them.

"Good evening," he said, "and welcome, Mark, to the Falicity Training facility. You will start your training soon, but it is time to rest for tommorow. You will begin training in the morning."

[continued in: part 4- battle tactics]

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Old 13-05-2005, 04:33 AM
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Re: Toreki (Part 3 - Half the Battle)

I think you have a good beginning to a really good story I just wish they were a little longer. (Some where around 2500 words)
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Re: Toreki (Part 3 - Half the Battle)

you should explain the past more...
What lead up to this?
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