[Nupur]

**Sonnet. Written in the style of Wilfred Owen's 'The End'.


Chains of the sea will claim the wicked tide
and hush the falling waves that clash to bed.
Faintly, triumphant wind will blow and glide,
while toiling tocks of time will veil their dead.

Could those left ravaged on the battled beach
be sworn as victors, then be licensed life?
What force could drop from heights above our reach
which wrenches out their backs that bloody knife?

I’ll shake the laurels; grieve the startled birds
whose songs will hit and storm as thoughts in herds.
And when I call those nightingales, they’ll sing
those wasted words; in hero’s deaths they’ll ring,
“That hate will strike more glory far and wide
than thousands busted from the pounding tide.”

[Vorcla]

This is wonderful, Nup! The imagery is stunning, and your execution is flawless. You have such a mature style for someone so young. I am so glad you decided to start posting. I'm starting to think of you as being on a par with Bri and Mike and Chris and Phon, Syrah and Fire, and all the other really fine poets on this site. Awesome.

Hope my "Praise" isn't "Wasted" on you!

[Nupur]

Thank you very much.

[Corneac]

This is amazing. Absolutely-fan-fricking-tastic. The imagery, the flow, the ease of use in a sonnet. The similie of waves...carried throughout, and I loved the effect. It was effortless...

I could quote my favourite line, but I'd be quoting the whole poem.

POTM material definitely. *coughs* Bri *coughs*

[Vorcla]

Originally Posted by Sigmund

This is amazing. Absolutely-fan-fricking-tastic. The imagery, the flow, the ease of use in a sonnet. The similie of waves...carried throughout, and I loved the effect. It was effortless...

I could quote my favourite line, but I'd be quoting the whole poem.

POTM material definitely. *coughs* Bri *coughs*

I'll second that - the whole thing!

[Zoidberg]

Right now, all I can say, is that you people are making me like poetry more and more! You used excellent Imagery. Good Work.

[Corneac]

Poetry is awesome. You should try some! There' a poet in everyone...look at Rick

[Vorcla]

Originally Posted by Sigmund

Poetry is awesome. You should try some! There' a poet in everyone...look at Rick

If there is, he hasn't gotten out yet!

[Gurdit]

Nice one.
I'm not used to such long sentences in poems, but I read it a couple more times, and I liked it.
Some of the words and phrases you've chosen are really good.
I see to see that you write a lot of poems like this one. I can't really put my finger on the theme exactly, but they're all related to each other somehow.

[Corneac]

War (too short)

[Gurdit]

Of course, but not just war in general...
Her poems touch upon war in various ways, yet with a certain fixed perspective, I find.

[Lubesh]

That was just beautiful and intelligent and yes mature...and u showed me once...'searching though and 'It'..lol i rest my case.

[Nupur]

You people are fantastic!

Originally Posted by Corneac

This is amazing. Absolutely-fan-fricking-tastic. The imagery, the flow, the ease of use in a sonnet. The similie of waves...carried throughout, and I loved the effect. It was effortless...

I could quote my favourite line, but I'd be quoting the whole poem.

POTM material definitely. *coughs* Bri *coughs*

I told you this over chat. Saying it again. I'm crimson right now. Thank you.

Originally Posted by DnDDmDb642

Right now, all I can say, is that you people are making me like poetry more and more! You used excellent Imagery. Good Work.

Thank you very much! And poetry IS awesome. There's no reason why you shouldn't read, or for that matter write your own poems.

Originally Posted by tidruG

Nice one.
I'm not used to such long sentences in poems, but I read it a couple more times, and I liked it.
Some of the words and phrases you've chosen are really good.
I see to see that you write a lot of poems like this one. I can't really put my finger on the theme exactly, but they're all related to each other somehow.

I'm glad you liked it. Your opinion always means a lot. About the long sentences part, I had to do it because it's a sonnet. Traditionally it should be in iambic pentameter. But I suck so much at counting syllables and recognizing accented and unaccented ones that I really can't tell if I've succeeded. I'll be glad if someone helps me out in this regard.

Originally Posted by Lubesh

That was just beautiful and intelligent and yes mature...and u showed me once...'searching though and 'It'..lol i rest my case.

Thanks Lu! Hahaha, resting your case, aye?

@Rick, you write fantastic poetry. Can't wait to see more! And thank you very much for all the praise.

[Vorcla]

Originally Posted by Nupur;

@Rick, you write fantastic poetry. Can't wait to see more! And thank you very much for all the praise.

Thanks, hun. When I do poetry, it's all instinctive. I don't know anything about forms and syllable counts and meter and all that stuff the rest of you guys do. Most of my poems make me squirm - but I try.

As far as the praise goes, you've earned it.

[Rain]

I'm gonna be a little like Rick here and say "JESUS!" that was more enthusiastic but I don't care. Because that was great, flowed, imagery was nice, and you made it look easy! Great job Nup!