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Haikus and Hokkus - 4th Edition
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10-06-2007, 12:59 AM
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Haikus and Hokkus - 4th Edition
Greedily hiding, The turmoil that now appears, Who are we to blame? --- Every writer's fear, An accursed slump sets in, Curse my hand's weakness! --- A friend's hand on mine, A quite happy smile dawns, "Stop being a tease!" --- Holding together, The fragments of memory, To reform the past. --- The fires burn it all, Taking all to the Flame's hand, Making way for new.
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10-06-2007, 02:39 AM
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Re: Haikus and Hokkus - 4th Edition
Yay! Lovely haikus, kishi!
"A reassuring smile dawns," You seem to be just a bit over in the syllable count, but that's okay ^_^ Are you able to write again?
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He opens his eyes, a thrilling reality. Lights, trees, and endless morality. Senses hale a slumbering love, Preaching to all a life up above. Little does he know, This is forbidden darkness, Straight from Christmas cheer.
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10-06-2007, 05:37 AM
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Re: Haikus and Hokkus - 4th Edition
Fixed the syllables, I forgot there was an "a" in reassuring! Hahahaha...
No not yet, I think I'm suffering from post-illness writing, perhaps my time as a poet has run out!? NOOOO...
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10-06-2007, 08:37 AM
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Ahahaha! Ahem, nevermind.
No, no, you'll come back as brilliant as ever. ^_^
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He opens his eyes, a thrilling reality. Lights, trees, and endless morality. Senses hale a slumbering love, Preaching to all a life up above. Little does he know, This is forbidden darkness, Straight from Christmas cheer.
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10-06-2007, 10:16 AM
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Re: Haikus and Hokkus - 4th Edition
A friend's hand on mine,
A happy smile dawns, "Stop being a tease!" I maybe wrong masa, would have to reacquaint myself, but was this this, 5 counts each line deliberate- as opposed to5-7-5? I enjoyed your collection though..
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10-06-2007, 01:38 PM
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Re: Haikus and Hokkus - 4th Edition
Thanks Lubesh and Para-chan.
No idea Lubesh, I'm forcing myself to write now.
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You guys all know I'm a lazy reviewer, so please PLEASE PM me if you want a specific poem or story commented on! There's no pleasure in eeny-meany-mieny-moe-ing everything nowadays! Yare yare...
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11-06-2007, 05:20 AM
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Do you mean that it's odd that the line is 5-6-5?
^_^ Sorry Masa-kun I had to laugh...
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He opens his eyes, a thrilling reality. Lights, trees, and endless morality. Senses hale a slumbering love, Preaching to all a life up above. Little does he know, This is forbidden darkness, Straight from Christmas cheer.
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12-06-2007, 09:49 PM
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Oh no problem. I'm not thinking straight... I have to cut myself off from these medical remedies...
Pretty pink elephant...
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21-05-2008, 09:01 AM
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Re: Haikus and Hokkus - 4th Edition
Again, I bow to the elegance and beauty (physically, mentally/emotionally) of your creation.
Please accept my rating of 5/5!  :lov e:
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Right, I'll keep to the present but just take a glance at the past. Damn, is this poetry?
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