[Syrah]

Breathe,
Breathe it in.
The cars on the street,
The rain in the air,
The fragrance of life.
Just Breathe,
Breathe it all in.

[Lubesh]

The cars on the street seemed a contradiction or unusual aspect....i took the ecological view rightly or wrongly but as a compliment it works also...nice and green syrah.

[Masa]

Sounds like the wind. That, at least, is what I heard when I read this. Fascinating, a tie with nature, as well as showing mankind's scar on it. Where cars have become as regular as the rain.

[Syrah]

Thank you for the comments. This one, although can be interpreted personally, to me is taking a moment.... drinking in all the things around you--- it is all life and is all a miracle.... a moment to appreciate it all.

[Storiesmaniac]

Ooooh nice poem...i kinda just saw someone standing at the top of a peak, looking down over a town just after going for a run, breathing in everything they saw. Like they finally noticed what they had been running past every day...probs not what you meant...but still hit me...nice poem.

[BrokenParadox]

Yes, nice ^_^
It reminded me of the times I've just stood there on a rainy day breathing in the cold air....coughing from the cars' exhaust.
^_^ Lovely, Syrah.

[Corneac]

Mm...I loved this. Truy. Beautiful. And to the point.

Great job Sy.

[Dark Kitten]

Fragrance of life... that pleases me.
(keeping the comment short to fit the poem)
~DK

[Timmay]

Originally Posted by Lubesh

The cars on the street seemed a contradiction or unusual aspect....i took the ecological view rightly or wrongly but as a compliment it works also...nice and green syrah.

i dissagree. What he is telling you is not to breath in nature. he's just saying breathe everything. Kuz everything is a part of life.

[Dark Kitten]

HEHE he! Poor Syrah! I think YOU need the lipstick!
~DK

[Syrah]

So I'm afraid I do. And here I was wearing lip gloss... Must not be girlie enough hehe

[Venomous Vixen]

Aww a little snippet of you, a moment to appreciate life. This one was great, like a smack to the reader to take a moment and look around, take it in and break from the repetitive routine... and green, the color of calm and nature, nice touch.

[Syrah]

Thanks honny. Looking back at it now. It seems like a good little motto or something like that. I always try to keep things in a perspective even though sometimes things go haywire in one's life. I really appreciate your comments love.

[Ryankia]

Very simple and beautiful Syrah! The green text just adds to the meaning of the piece.

[nobodylaiceps]

Are all your poems this brief? Seems to me they'd be a little better with another stanza or so. too positive...

[Vorcla]

Oh, I love this, honny. I'm reading it now in the sense you intended for it - "stop and smell the roses." And, boy, do I need that right now. This is wonderful, Sweetie. Thanks for suggesting I read it to calm down. I'm going to copy it and carry it with me, then pull it out when ever I get stressed - which is about every 8 seconds!

[Syrah]

I'm glad it fills the intention. Thank you so very much