[Alex]

Flee quickly; look back,
Hide secretively; just now.
Plead for your savior,
He will fight for your own heart,
Not for you, for him, his part.

Rescue her; Saurie,
Do not let her stray from you.
This is no nightmare,
You seem to not even care.
Feel the guilt, this game you play.

Two are one, which one,
The only, who you called son,
Birdie, run now, fly,
Flee to the heavens of this,
Cry to the seven of them.

[Venomous Vixen]

I often have trouble understanding the bigger picture in your work. Stanza by stanza I think I got this one, but I am not sure how it all connects.

Plead for your savior,
He will fight for your own heart,
Not for you, for him, his part.

I loved that bit... the truth behind it is well said, the greed and selfishness of a 'deity'

Also, I wondered about the reference to 'seven of them', seven deadly sins perhaps or were you referencing something else?

[Alex]

I was actually referring to a Greek myth of seven holy oracles that were said to overlook man and mentor the good inside him. I thought, have her told to run to heaven, a safe place really, and holy gods would be waiting to watch over her.

[Rain]

Now that you explain that, it really makes a lot of sense. I had no clue at the start, but thank you for explaining it.

Rhyming.. was iffy. Rhymed at the start of the last stanza, and the end of the first stanza, and then in the middle with the second.. I guess it works in a way... but didn't for me.

Not much more I can say for this one bro. Overall concept was cool, rhyming wasn't very cool.

[spinx]

nice!!! work.