[Venomous Vixen]

Clawed, tangled, raven-blue hair and yesterdays
drifting away, mindless it fades, wrapped in you -
fingertips and limbs,
with a whisper your grin haunts me,
taunts me with that raven-blue hair, tangled, clawed.

Sleep but waits for me, lingering in her nightly seduction,
abduction of my sanity, thoughts trapped in what was
vanity, your hair, unspoken lust,
alone my eyes greet her, waiting, she draws me to you
grinning the way you used to.

Lost, fumbling, crimson red lips upon my flesh
undressing memory, tenderly wrapped in you-
fingertips and limbs,
with a whisper your grin haunts me,
taunts me with those crimson red lips, fumbling, lost.

Sleep presses her breast against me, lingering in her nightly seduction,
abduction of my senses, undressing memory,
naked she grasps yesterdays,
drifting away on waves of raven-blue and crimson
in oblivion we sit, and for one more night it's alright,
Just one last time, we fit.

[Lubesh]

Blimey and bloody hell, that was fabulous....and I looked for a pattern - this time lol, ur a talented lady and no msitake this was ...enchanting.yep that's the word. Spectacular is another. Raven blue and crimson. The last verse for me was breathtaking really.

[Venomous Vixen]

Well thank you very much!

[Vorcla]

I think all the verses are breathtaking. I love this; looks like you kept your draft intact. I'm glad, because it was super.

You do sexy and sensuous so well, Bri. The images...gaaahhhh! The words - tangled; clawed; abduction; seduction; haunts me; taunts me.

"drifting away on waves of raven-blue and crimson..."

God.

The juxtaposition of those two colors is just fabulous. So vivid. As Lu said, "You are one talented lady." Great job, hun.

And I know it's a great poem when I read it and need to take a cold shower...

[Venomous Vixen]

Hehe, thank you very much. I am rather fond of this one, or rather, it is growing on me quickly. And cold showers... lol, yes I can see that.

[Vorcla]

Hey! Totally OT - you passed 4000 posts! Congrats! I'm coming up on 2K myself.

[Venomous Vixen]

Ha, so I did. I need to pay more attention, missed my one year around here, now this. Sheesh. Thanks for reminding me hun (And yes, you are close.)

[RENA HANDS]

WOW!(Wickedl y captivating!)

As stated with Eadha Deora…I am blown away by your BRILLIANCE!

The imagery, emotions…vocabulary execution play of the simplest word…EXCELLENT!

I thought your second and third stanzas were the BEST!

My rating 5/5!

[Venomous Vixen]

Thank you very much, Rena!

[colinbaker62]

Your command of the English language is first-class!





Colin

[Venomous Vixen]

Thank you very much, Colin! Always a treat to receive a comment from you.

[Maylar]

Well I always liked your works (probably being obvious from my former posts) and this one is far from breaking that rule. To put it plain and simple, I love it. Is there more to say? Well, maybe...the choice of words just nailed me to the wall and did not let me bread...but that suffocation was pleasant. This poem have taste, delicate and spicy, much as a special wine...I drink it with pleasure and for that, I thank you very much

[Venomous Vixen]

Thank you very much hun and good to see you back around here