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Old 19-12-2008, 05:27 AM
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[PICK] The Word is Mightier than the Medication

Voices murmur
Brushing through my thoughts
Like a whispering wind.
The words penetrate me
Like an electric shock
Given from a psycho psychiatric doctor.
I am confused,
Yet the message is clear.
Dominate.
The word echoes through the corners of my mind.
Dominate.
I shiver.
The padded cell seems to shrink around me.
Dominate
The world.
Conquer
All.
The words torture me.
How I ask.
Let me show you.
The words seem to smile menacingly.
The words engulf me.
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Old 21-12-2008, 10:16 AM
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Re: The Word is Mightier than the Medication

Oh, this is creepy. Spooky, actually. Definitely a dark mood. I like some of the wordplay you bring in, Kat, like "psycho psychiatric doctor." This is very thoughtful, almost cerebral. Nicely done!
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Old 21-12-2008, 10:25 AM
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Re: The Word is Mightier than the Medication

Mm, nice and psychological. The title caught me and made me read it, so it definitely did its job well!

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Re: The Word is Mightier than the Medication

Short and sweet. Left me wanting to read more, which is always a good thing
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Thanks y'all. . .
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Re: [PICK] The Word is Mightier than the Medication

I enjoyed how it read off, quick. Especially near the end. The title caught me as well, it definitely drew me in. I agree on the question mark point that Beagle made, I also stopped for a second and was going to suggest it believe it or not. . Although there is the 'ask' dilemma, the last five lines were my favorite of the poem. Especially the last one, it really hit me.
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Re: [PICK] The Word is Mightier than the Medication

I was seriously debating adding it after either How or ask. . . I couldn't decide so i thought that I'd put it up to see what y'all thought. . . thanx again
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Re: [PICK] The Word is Mightier than the Medication

Hmmm, is the person wanting to conquer by writing?

Sorry, I'm kinda literal, the title confuses me.

I liked this though, yeah, power to the people...in the cells! lol
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