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Old 25-08-2008, 01:33 PM
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When the Sword is Mightier than the Pen

On the surface
Of my dried parchment,
Tinged,
Cracking are the
kicked up layers of strewn debris
of flaking tales,
Etched with a fine nib -
The finest,
Gleaming in its triumphs,
Glinting are its wicked scratches,
It has one more chapter to write.
It glowers, hovering above naked,
moist and trembling skin,
before it plunges, gouges and scores
Its last victory
In
Its final word on the subject,
And into the subject,
that is me.
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Old 26-08-2008, 06:28 AM
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Re: When the Sword is Mightier than the Pen

I had images of "sword of Damocles" with this one, waiting for that final thrust. I saw a metaphor throughout linking parchment and skin, driven home at the end. The words were simple but powerful. A well crafted piece!
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Old 26-08-2008, 06:31 AM
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Thank you.
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Re: When the Sword is Mightier than the Pen

I echo what Bluejay said about the parchment/skin metaphor. So much alike. I don't think you've ever written a clunker. Nice work, Lu.
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