[Rain]

I look into your eyes,
and I see a hatred, a hatred
that’s staring right back at me.
Meeting my gaze

I see a bottomless pit,
one that we slipped into together,
the pit would later be named love.

I see a deceiving, manipulative,
yet confused little girl.
And I only seem to complicate,
and confuse the confusion.

I stumble upon my thoughts,
tripping into my self created mud,
formed by hate and love.

Self inflicted wounds
on my knuckles bleed,
I feel I deserve this.
I continue in my state of frustration

Eye contact is rare,
and words are hard to find.
My hand is shaking, your chin quivering.

My pride is obsolete,
I disdain what I've become,
and envy what I was.
Karma has begun it's attack.

I find myself lost,
in a forest of thoughts.
Where the trees mock me,
the clouds giggle at my tears,
and the exit is not to be found.

Each time I think about it
my throat closes up,
and it stings to speak.

Yet I talk to myself,
til my throat bleeds
drops of insanity that are
slowly taken from me.

Each time I see you,
my stomach curls up
into a ball of nerves.

Feeling sick each moment,
my insides hurt, my
feet are cold and numb,
yet I walk on the cold floor.

I dream my broken dreams,
like a slide show passing through
the lives that we together destroyed.

Suffocated and smothered,
I’m pushed into the deep end,
the blood spills from my mouth,
I was trying not to speak.

Sleepless nights are persistent,
the clock sits at 1:48, for
what seem like an eternity.

A second a minute,
a minute an hour,
an hour a day,
a day a week,
a week a month,
and a month a year.
As times takes it’s time.

[Blink]

That was pretty cool man, I loved some of the stanzas, others I wasn't a huge fan of, the ones I liked

"Each time I think about it
my throat closes up,
and it stings to speak.

Yet I talk to myself,
til my throat bleeds
drops of insanity that are
slowly taken from me."

Those 2 were pretty cool, especially the second, the first one just seemed to assist to it. Also

"I see a deceiving, manipulative,
yet confused little girl.
And I only seem to complicate,
and confuse the confusion."

That one was pretty awesome, I like the way you had confuse, confused, and confusion, that was pretty cool the way that was played out. Oh and one line I liked was:

"Karma has begun it's attack."

That for me was one of the best parts, I don't know why, it just seemed as if regret even though it seemed to be the other persons fault or they are to blame somehow you still feel guilty in a way. However I didn't like some. Such as

"Self inflicted wounds
on my knuckles bleed,
I feel I deserve this.
I continue in my state of frustration

Eye contact is rare,
and words are hard to find.
My hand is shaking, your chin quivering."

Didn't really like those, just seemed lacking in the quality the others put forth. Sorry if I stepped on your toes at all I just wanted to go into detail, and I already know you love me and I love you(no homo) so you can't be mad . Seriously, good job.

-Scott

[Rain]

I'm not mad, in fact you barely said anything bad about it. . Thanks for taking a look, and thanks for the compliments, Scott.

[Maylar]

This look as three different people written it in different times, then mix it...theme is the same, but style jump from one to another: rhyme, not rhyme, line more here, line less there...but, don't get me wrong: I'm not criticizing it in a bad manner. For me, even unusual, that felt great, cause kept me on my toes, waiting for the next line. I like that.
Otherwise then that, you have some really serious and deep thoughts, greatly presented. Those thoughts are the real nails of this poem...they are hammered deeply into the readers mind and make him/her linger above it, in pure admiration.
I truly enjoyed. Thanks.

[Rain]

Thanks Maylar.