[dearest]

Like some land messiah, I break bread

to scatter by the fountain,

by the park bench,

Like soft-edged rain

Or manna from

Heaven

Something extra-sensual

Visceral

Driving

bids them closer

On stutter-soft wings

To alight

a flutter of exhiliration

In a speckled, roiling wave

They embrace the miracle

And for a moment, I'm enveloped in their tiny euphoria.

[Syrah]

Did you try using the ident different amounts of times? That should work fine. ([indent]) and like quote ending with /INDENT in the []'s.

LIKE

THIS

[dearest]

Thank you Syrah, that helps SO much!

[Venomous Vixen]

The set up on this was fantastic, scattered crumbs of bread. The words were up to par as well, beautifully portrayed moment. Makes me want to go spend lunch at the duck pond tomorrow.

[Ryankia]

Words and presentation beautiful! Well done!

[Syrah]

This gives me an idea for a poem..... if you don't mind me copying the style. BTW~ turned out fabulous, much better than using the code text. Very nice FI

[dearest]

Thanks to Bri and Dragoness, your comments are much appreciated. And that's fine with me Syrah, I don't mind. Can't wait to see what you're going to write!

[LullabyHearts]

Like some land messiah, I break bread
to scatter by the fountain,
by the park bench,

I really liked the beginning of this
Well done, Fire!
Glad you told me this was up! Yay
Woohoo love the format of it.

[dearest]

Thanks Haruna.