[Corneac]

you know – when you just know
void of subtle gesture,

that sends presence of mind

curling

curling

curling

smoke toward peripheral stare,
as the sky is distilled into night,
a purplish haze of darkness,

lying here,
where the ground meets the heavens,

smoke-

coiling

coiling

coiling

like the cogs of my mind,
a mechanism,
machinery,
endless ------
déjà vu without a concrete memory
of what was


I am caught –
suspended between the night
and the sky, my back pressed
under the weight of purplish feigned blackness

and the knowing
that flows
-part angst
-part, restlessly,

that cannot break ---

in

in

in…

a stutter

surging at tides,
the bank, the lining,
where wind and water
meet the sky – I lie

in knowing…

or not knowing

[Masa]

Wow, very nice. It is still early morning, and my mind cannot truly comprehend your meaning, but I love the poetry in its current form, and also enjoy the imaging you create.

[DarkPower]

I liked.. the hope for the poem but something just didnt sit well with me. I might have gotten lost in trying to see the structure of maybe I read the words without really trying to understand the meaning of them, but I think you had so much going on that I counldnt concentrate.

[Venomous Vixen]

Now that you have given me a bit of background on this one it makes perfect sense and is really rather beautiful... imaging you lying there, smoking, lost in the night and in your thoughts. It also makes the structure much more clear, like the fleeting smoke, curling up. From the first time I read this and still I love the last two lines, raises questions again.... something you have been doing a lot with your work lately, making me think. The whole de ja vous struck me as well, the way you used it as something other than a concrete feeling but still something familiar. Very clever my little bugger. I think what is hard with this piece is that it is so personal, so deep in your own mind that it becomes hard to relate to and thus loses your captive audience. Regardless, it is a beautiful piece of work and with a little explanation opens up for so much reflection.