[colinbaker62]

Remember how you'd scream,
and afterwards, how you'd gently sway
before me,

- so translucent -

like a hickory leaf in white sunlight?

And remember how you'd bandage your
tongue, yet still it would bleed, regardless?

I so wanted to
lap the blood from your mouth.

My unfulfilled prophecy.





Colin Baker April 08

[Nupur]

What a wonderful part 3! Again, great wordplay. I love the poem in its entirety, but I specially lived the ending.

I so wanted to
lap the blood from your mouth.

My unfulfilled prophecy.

Very powerful lines you got there.

[colinbaker62]

Originally Posted by Nupur

What a wonderful part 3! Again, great wordplay. I love the poem in its entirety, but I specially lived the ending.


Very powerful lines you got there.

Hi Nupur and many thanks indeed (and for your kind comments on Our Love parts I and II also).




Colin

[RENA HANDS]

This is a response to all three parts...

-for years now a parted

Possibly…

-for years now departed

or

- for years now parted

The original ‘a parted’ seems out of tune. (*This comes from Part II).

Bravo! The blatant imagery simply, superb!

A standing ovation to such originality in the execution of your personal experience, emotions…this is my guess.

Crimson roses thrown to such a beautiful writer.

My rating is most definitely a 5/5!

[colinbaker62]

Originally Posted by RENA HANDS

This is a response to all three parts...



Possibly…
or


The original ‘a parted’ seems out of tune. (*This comes from Part II).

Bravo! The blatant imagery simply, superb!

A standing ovation to such originality in the execution of your personal experience, emotions…this is my guess.

Crimson roses thrown to such a beautiful writer.

My rating is most definitely a 5/5!

Rena thank you very much. And your analysis is most welcome...


Colin