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24-05-2008, 10:08 PM
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Contradictory Deliverance
People, their faces
like rippled moons, keep telling me things. 'Both generosity and thrift are virtues' they say... 'Both extravagance and meanness are vices' they say... Like pebbles pitched into a pond, their contradictions make ripples in my mind. Colin Baker May 2008 Last edited by colinbaker62; 24-08-2008 at 01:45 AM. 
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27-05-2008, 06:09 AM
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Re: Contradictory Deliverance
Nice flow, beautiful form. love the connection between the first and last verses with the ripples.. great work all in all.
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27-05-2008, 12:36 PM
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Re: Contradictory Deliverance
loved the "rippled moons" description. Keep up the good work.
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27-05-2008, 12:59 PM
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Re: Contradictory Deliverance
Lovely colin and was said the play on he ripple was excellent..some ncie wordage also. hope ur well.
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28-05-2008, 04:13 AM
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Re: Contradictory Deliverance
Many thanks to Prescription, Jason and Lubesh...Your collective comments are most appreciated....
Colin
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