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This was truly beautiful ... fresh and bright, tangible yet dream-like. The whole poem was like a journey of unfolding life and light. This is a piece you should commit to memory, to share whenever the moment is right. It would befit a soft whisper in the early morning hours.
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Also .... it seems to be read two ways .. either a lover with lover .. or a parent with newborn child. Makes me feel a mushy and melty inside, hehe.
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Thankyou Eadha! That means a lot coming from you. Yes I guess it can be read two ways...
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well .. the rocking motion ... either love-making .. or rocking a child to sleep. That was what made it hard to distinguish. As well as the description of "her" being so petite and sweet and sleepy.
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so beautiful corn it doesnt need a title. good stuff mate
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Yes...or maybe I just couldn't think of one Kel. Thanks all.
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Really you owe this one a title (don't worry I will spare you my ideas
) Beautiful, seriously, and rhyme fits well on you... not overly done or forced but just added to the flow. By far my favorite part-Quote:
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