[Razor]

Beautiful sunsets,
And mystical moon rises,
Over a maiden without pain,
Over a maiden without shame.

She lived in a land with no equal,
And God made to her no sequel.
But deception lurked like a dagger,
Lodged within goodness, making it stagger.

Remorseless darkness begins to fall.
Fear awakens, and starts to call.
A storm besieges the enchanting land,
Thunder, Lightning, Hail like sand.

And caught among its furious waves,
A single maiden upon it angrily lays.
A storm of depression, self pity and guilt,
As retched as dirt, as fine as silt.

Between her and the storm, I firmly stand.
Absorbing the blows, dealt by its hand.
And after the wake of the raging storm,
Beside her I stay to keep her warm.

Then away I dash before HE arrives.
My anger flares, and my insides writhe.
My goddess, my angel, my rarest of flowers,
Lured back to him by some unknown power.

He promises empty, lecherous vows.
He anointing his loyalty, ever so foul.
But I see through his rotten lies,
To him, who created the storm of demise.

Before long, there is a change in the weather.
I watch, again, as the storm clouds gather.
Beseeched to watch till that fateful hour,
For over him... I have no power.

[Storiesmaniac]

Perfect man. That's a really good poem keep up the good work.

[Razor]

Thanks stories. I'll see what I can do.

[Lubesh]

Fine techncial detail enhances your powerfully descriptive little story. Good one!

[Venomous Vixen]

Oh I really like this one. I thought it was going to be all sappy in the beginning but it took some really interesting turns. The capitalized HE really fit well. Great imagery as well, and use of natural disasters. Look forward to seeing more!

[Razor]

Thank you, both of you. I wrote this from personal experiences. Its not just women, but I must say they seem the major that go back to guys that just don't treat them with the respect they deserve.

I've watched many a girls, who go into a relationship naive, get used and tossed aside... until the guy decides he wants something from the girl again, and then some how, he lures the girl back to him. HOW THE HELL DO THEY DO THAT!?!

[Venomous Vixen]

Originally Posted by Razor

I've watched many a girls, who go into a relationship naive, get used and tossed aside... until the guy decides he wants something from the girl again, and then some how, he lures the girl back to him. HOW THE HELL DO THEY DO THAT!?!

Haha that is not something that you want to learn because in the end those are not the guys women grow old with. I think those guys need to UNLEARN that behavior! (Plus, those are not the kind of girls you want anyways!)

Thanks for adding the meaning behind that, it is much more powerful to me now!

[Razor]

Yea, I'm not for doing that to a girl, but it’s very frustrating to see it happen. I've been friends with and even had crushes on girls that let guys treat them no better than a Kleenex, in the all meanings of that analogy. Yet, they go back, sometimes more than once.... there is no way any one is worth that.

[Venomous Vixen]

No, there is no way anyone is like that. Best thing you can do for someone stuck in that type of situation is let them know how amazing they truly are. Generally it is low self-esteem and self-worth that keep them there. Even that does not always work though, and I fear there is nothing more you can do, just have to let them realize on their own.

You did see the movie Forest Gump didn't you? Perfect example of a beautiful, smart and talented woman who spent her life dating assholes until she found out she was dying... and then went back to the sweet one.

[Razor]

Yep, ole Forest, and true enough. Sometimes it takes a world alterating event to make them open their eyes.

It's just sad, it takes so long sometimes. I guess you live and learn.