[Lubesh]

Author's note...havent played it yet bit had Piano man in the back of my head when writing this by Billy Joel so inspired by him largley - hope it isn't too samey


So play me a song with a mellow man
Play me song I can sing
Play me a tune with my melody
only then can we begin

Make it dark, melodic and proud
make it sombre, but not too out loud
Make it grab me till I squeeze out and shout
The words he heard me sing

And Sing for me while I remedy
Things of the past and the now
Play me a tune I can holler till noon
Give me something to help just me

Play it out
Play it bad
Play it all
Play it softly for now
Let me hear…
A song

You trail off low and benevolently
You seem to have lost your appeal
Here’s a dollar bill for your energy still
I am sinking and I’m out of here

I stare at the moon as she watches me
I throw my face to the floor
And hum a tune to myself in the gloom
Hum louder then play it some more

Never mess with me
I’m a melody
Play me wrong
And you play not to win
Strumming my name
While your sleeping heart sings
To another
For what
A symphony?

Play it out
Play it bad
Play it all
Pay it softly for now
Let me hear…
A song

[Venomous Vixen]

I absolutely love this one Anita. I sang it to the suggested tune and it was spot on (though I now have Piano Man in my head).

I stare at the moon as she watches me
I throw my face to the floor
And hum a tune to myself in the gloom
Hum louder then play it some more

My favorite, the moon (she hehe) watching and you fling to the ground. Do more of these ones, gosh they are amazing.

[Lubesh]

Idothembut they never stay what thry r but certianly helpa s a launch. But am getting better with keeping thetune thanks bri i will carry on then lol

[RENA HANDS]

You’re missing a period at the end of your Synopsis or whatever…(lol) Also (Haven’t played…)

I know this melody well but must state that your addition is something jazzy.(Sorry, not such a great comment.)

I know very little of the music world, much like the fashion so my words are limited.

Make it dark, melodic and proud

Make it somber, but not too out loud

(Did you intend to be of the same thought?)

What about saying…

Make it grab me till I squeeze out and shout ?

(You eliminate “loud” twice.)

What about…I stare at the moon as she watches me
And throw myself to the floor
(Or)
Throwing myself to the floor
I hum a tune to myself in the gloom
Hum louder then play it some more

[Vorcla]

Once at a gig I was playing, somebody asked me if I could play "Piano Man." I held up my guitar and asked, "Does this look like a piano to you?!"

Nice work, Lu. The rhythm patterns fall in quite nicely with the original tune. Good job.

[Lubesh]

ha goodstory that!....thanks rick