[Lubesh]

Bewitched, bejewelled, beguiled,
A notion maybe, or just words – but all for you.
Too much emotion, frenzied potions, but meant well all the same.

Remote, removed, reluctant,
A token maybe, or just words – but all for me.
Too plainly spoken, often harsh, but rare all the same.

Lachrymose, languish, languid,
A savage flow or maybe just words – but all meant for me.
Too much lavished, more cutting is your mood, unsaid, but said all the same.

So, as I tug at your sleeve without emotion or motion
and drape over you my thoughts in my desperation
and cover the doorway with a mental suggestion as you leave,
all my signals are unmasked and surpassed easily by your callous
and fast action as you choose yet again, not to...

Heed,
Read,
See,
Feel,
Hear...
that's nothing new,
but you all the same.

Downgraded, degraded, dredged,
A knife maybe, or just words – but they all find me
Too blunt your bladed life that twists the pain of silence; strange, but you all the same

[Bluejay]

As a fan of structure, I love this. And the alliteration is great, too (not to mention the words themselves). And, as always, packed with such emotion.

Nit: Extra "i" in "nothiing".

You also can come up with such provocative titles...

[Lubesh]

Thanks very much...but the title...erm may change it ha

[xtremelady]

The picture is seared into your mind, unexpressed raw emotion...the result of her own choosing to some degree, trapped there in a circle - which then relates to ‘all the same...’

The armour reinforced by their inability to see beyond ...the double meaning actually to my mind worked well

Brilliantly executed Lu – as always

[Lubesh]

thanks claire and for reading.....still not keen on my title tho lol nm

[Nupur]

Wow Lu! You never cease to amaze me. I loved your theme, the form, alliteration, choice of words... everything. Beautifully written.

[Lubesh]

Thanks nupur and for taking time much appreciated..go study less web!

[Venomous Vixen]

Yup, you just keep getting better and better (as if possible). This blew me away, the form alone was breathtaking, like a journey with clever alliteration and internal rhyme. Geez, clever one you are, I loooooved this!

[Lubesh]

Love ur comments too thanks bri!

[RENA HANDS]

Well I definitely applaud the alliteration and why not I’m in tongues myself (lol).

Bravo! Brava! Brissme! (I’m sure the last is spelled incorrectly, but boowoo.)

Did you catch the last bit? I know you’re laughing.

A great poem. The emotions were truly piercing as were the words illustrating your heart.

[Lubesh]

Ha bravo rena....lol ty

[Vorcla]

Nicely done, as always Lu. Nice alliteration and internal rhyme - great imagery, always.

[Lubesh]

Thanks you very much