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Old 19-07-2008, 05:15 AM
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A Hopeful Goodbye?

Always through a haze I peered,
I searched but never found you,
Though once or twice I thought I felt
But the wind took that away.
I won’t look again for fear of drowning,
My heart would not stand the cruel
Currents and fight is all but gone.
Somehow watching I think you knew,
Somewhere you have that part of me,
Hidden and kept safe,
The other I have to let go of now,
And lose without a trace,
But fragments still remain,
Entwined and forever here,
To keep me from impossible hope,
When tempestuous are my thoughts
And my heart drives me to the comfort
Of insanity.

So from within my fragile shell,
I still have you, my precious thing,
I will treasure and remember always,
Pleasured memories when they sing.
I am loath to let you go just yet,
and break my heart along with
this golden egg, which I want to cherish
and savour the moments born here
and into infinity if need be and for longer yet,
but I have to and I will, so that I may
once again smile, that day is coming
soon, I promise myself, but I still
have you in here… meanwhile and until.
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Old 19-07-2008, 06:54 AM
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Incredible! Oh, but what is this…a spelling error…lol

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…and break my heart aong with
I think you mean…and break my heart (along) with

Rating of 5/5!

Now an observation, you rarely use ‘I,’ so I am wondering do you write these poems with any intent to show one or more side of the lover or lovee?*(not the actual spelling, but whatever...) They read so emotionally connectible and that’s what makes them GREAT in my opinion.
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Old 19-07-2008, 07:01 AM
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Thanks Rena . I see, yep just a piece, a ghost to let go of..tried writing is all.
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Old 20-07-2008, 03:19 AM
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Re: A Hopeful Goodbye?

Wow. Having trouble finding words.

How about "wonderful?"
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Old 20-07-2008, 05:18 AM
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I will take that and thank you very much.
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Old 20-07-2008, 07:22 PM
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I am short of words after that! But you'll probably know what effect that had on me.
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Old 20-07-2008, 11:50 PM
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Indeedy,Thanks Kota.glad to se you around here.
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Re: A Hopeful Goodbye?

A very tricky bit, this one. Not a cursory or obligatory glimpse.

My favorite single line:

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and into infinity if need be and for longer yet,
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Old 21-07-2008, 01:45 AM
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Maybe with it being to near to home. Thanks though forthat.
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