[Maylar]

I can run through whole September,
golden colors, golden dawns...
I can walk on in October,
with the red leaves' silent moans.

In November I still trudge,
with uncried tears in eyes.
But heart breaks down in December,
when the first of snowflakes falls.

In December I cry sadly,
and no wind can shut me down.
In December I call loudly,
name forever lost in time.

In December pure pain nails me,
to the cold and naked ground.
In December, with snow falling,
I fall down without a sound.

I can run through whole September,
with gold rain and golden dusk...
I can walk on in October,
when the nature lifts its mask.

In November I still trudge,
even pain then probes my soul.
But heart is broken when December
freezes up my desperate woes.

[dearest]

Excellent seasonal poem, and (at least this is what I got from it) a truly heartwrenching look at depression. Imagery and language throughout are excellent, and the flow and rhythm are great without resorting to rhymey-ness for structure. Overall, excellent work, enjoyed reading this very much.

[Jimbalaya]

This is kind of different. I really liked it. It is sort of dark, but the word December somehow makes it better. I know that's just me, but I love the word December. It seems magical for some reason.

Great visuals in there, I really liked the snow falling bit. I almost got cold! Great work!

[Vorcla]

Whoa - this is nice work. Hit a little too close to home; I'm prone to Seasonal Affective Disorder (SAD) and I could easily hibernate from November to April. Nice flow and wonderful images, and I like the way you repeat the motif at the end. Excellent.

[Venomous Vixen]

I will start with the minor little technical nitpicks...

I can run through whole September,
golden colors, golden dawns...

I feel like the first line is void of a word... like September should be plural or you should say 'the whole of...'

I can walk on in October,
with the red leaves' silent moans.

Everytime I read this stanza I flipped the two bolded letters and it changes the meaning a bit... but I thought I would point it out, it seemed to flow better this way for me.

Throughout the piece I noticed similar little things, almost like you are afraid of the little connectors which sometimes add to the piece.

Otherwise this is truly beautiful - the colors, the sounds, the season. I enjoyed the layout as well, the elaboration on each month, and especially on December, then the repetition with minor changes all to wrap up again in a very powerful conclusion. Excellent work.

[Rain]

This is different, and that's why I like it, it wasn't a typical heartbreak poem, it was almost something that could go in he Nature section, because the description of leaves and snow flakes and everything was simple, but you captured complexity with simplicity, which hit me hard and effective. It was really good, Maylar. Nice work.